ext_139905 (
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2007-11-15 01:25 am (UTC)
Dreammspell brochure, page 2
"Bright spirits can join forces" -- maybe just "Bright spirits join forces"? In the picture, the joining isn't just potential, but actual.
A "were-cat, or dog, rabbit or bear" -> "were-cat, or -dog, -rabbit or
-bear"
Wishing Well: it looks like there's an extra space after "maiden, ".
The Inner Cat: "There's more to anyone than we think we are": the pronouns don't match. "There's more to us than we think we are".
Postcard prices: "fewer than 10", not "less than 10"
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Dreammspell brochure, page 2
A "were-cat, or dog, rabbit or bear" -> "were-cat, or -dog, -rabbit or
-bear"
Wishing Well: it looks like there's an extra space after "maiden, ".
The Inner Cat: "There's more to anyone than we think we are": the pronouns don't match. "There's more to us than we think we are".
Postcard prices: "fewer than 10", not "less than 10"