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Calling All Nit-pickers!
Or junior editors:
I've completed the initial versions of my flyers for Fantasy Images and Mudra art, and am soliciting feedback. Have I missed any typos? Is something not working? If this were your flyer would you want the buyers for the stores to see it, and expect them to use it without trouble?
Dreamspell Catalog
Mudra Art Catalog
and the order form
Thanks!
I've completed the initial versions of my flyers for Fantasy Images and Mudra art, and am soliciting feedback. Have I missed any typos? Is something not working? If this were your flyer would you want the buyers for the stores to see it, and expect them to use it without trouble?
Dreamspell Catalog
Mudra Art Catalog
and the order form
Thanks!
Nit-picking's My Specialty
The heading is "... Fairies", but the individual description is labeled "Faery".
The description for the Faery of Noontide should end with a period, not a colon.
Two of the Faery titles include "the" and two don't. I'd say it isn't necessary for any of them.
In the description under Dreamroost, "Where do dreams come to roost?" may work better than "Where to the dreams come to roost?"
Are you sure the unicorn's baby is a colt? Or would "foal" be a better description? [Well, you did say "nitpick"!]
Unicorn Spirit: All my editorial training tells me not to split words between lines in this sort of document. But that's just me, and you probably can't fit all the words in without hyphenating. But if there is a way to fix it.... ("Spirit of a unicorn"?)
Faery Girl: I think "Faery girls can be whatever they want to be" should end with a period, not a colon.
Is it possible to make the layout of Greeting Cards / Postcards consistent? It looks like there may be room to put the number on the same line as the description for all of them, e.g.
Greeting Cards FEGC1057
Postcards FEPC1077
The bottom line for the last item being lower than for the other three made my inner editor twitch. Is there a description that would take fewer words? Would using just "Faeries" instead of "Faery girls" change what you meant? It might create enough room to reduce the description by a line.
...Let me know if that's the kind of nit-picking you wanted, and I'll continue.
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